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Marcey Abadeer

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PostSubject: Story opinions   Story opinions I_icon_minitimeSun Aug 11, 2013 7:05 am

I am writing a book called The Demon and the Angel and I need advice.


Prologue

A Demon was wandering around Hell, her master was slowing her to go to school for the first time. The master's name was Satan, or Lucifer as some people preferred to call him. He was pale with black wigs and black hair, he wasn't always cruel, sometimes he was kind. "Alexandria," he called. The wandering Demon went to her master and bowed lowly.

"Yes Sire?" She said, her master approached her and gently pt her.

"Go to bed, you have a long day tomorrow." He told her, she got up and hugged him then she left.
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PostSubject: Re: Story opinions   Story opinions I_icon_minitimeFri Aug 30, 2013 5:05 am

For starters that is not an epilogue or a pro log or any log of any time.... its a beginning to a story

its not even the summery.... just a start, so a sequel really.



(P.S. I professionally edit books for a semi odd living)

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